ESL writing 6

Which Path I should Go?
Catching up the developing pace of a society, the youth has opened a big revolution in living with opposite sex before marriages. Regardless of their age and their parents’ disapproval, some young boys and girls rush to pack their stuff, put their fingers on their lip and kiss goodbye kisses to their first nests.
Premarital cohabitation is acknowledged as a big problem relating to traditional culture in some countries. Throughout history, women are heavily obliged by old customs; especially customs which women must to keep themselves “virgin” before stepping into their husbands’ families. If they try to resist those “fences”, they won’t be penalty death or be tossed into on the pile of fire by laws or by customs. However, they will lose a lot of things. Their family, their neighbors and their friends will abandon, abuse, and despise them. Therefore, women who live with opposite sex before marriage seem to have no escapes. The society doesn’t welcome them. However, in recent years, reaching to western cultures, people gradually break through chains for women. They have more progressive ideologies. Seizing this chance, the youth begin to experience a husband-wife life before marriage. Premarital cohabitation has become a new style that teenager thinks they should try. The youth justifies that living with opposite helps them understand each other before marriage. Therefore, more and more young people adopt the premarital cohabitation. Being a youth, I asked myself that “Which one I should follow, ancient ideologies or new ideologies?” Most of men in Viet Nam care if their fiancée still have virgin or not. The funniest part is that most of men want their partner to live with them before marriage, but they require their wives are innocent girls who say no with “premarital cohabitation”. How to find them? I actually don’t understand.